So following up on some really useful feedback and critique on my last shot, i'll invite everyone to really tell me what they might like or more usefully NOT LIKE about this (any others in the blog link below)
I saw this shoot (maybe all shoots) as an experiment and had fun playing with techniques and ideas in trying to find an original way to present such well covered ground.
For me, and just for me, while overall I like the capture, I'd probably prefer color. But, that is because I so rarely see such events that I would want to see it for all its visual excitement. And, I think color would raise the emotional level and distinquishing differences between the competitors. The somewhat difficult problem facing the viewer is the lack of contrast in some places. For example, at the end of the bluff on the right it is difficult to seperate the boats from the small rocks at the base of the bluff. Also, the sailboats extend their masts above the water's horizon. Because of the light coloration of the mountains the tops of the masts get lost. The vignett works here because it does not seem to crowd the horizon as it would in a shorter shot. I like the blurred foreground affect. It adds interest but, guides the viewer to the more important activity than the painter's activity. And, the wave and surface texture of the water visually supports the broad focal point with its horizontal running lines. Honestly, if I were more expert and experienced as a viewer of these races maybe these points would not be that important. The subtle theme is not so obvious to me as it probably would be to an experienced viewer of such scenes. Since this is very unique to me I tend to look at every detail and enjoy it for all I can. So please remember that inaddition to being a failed novice photographer who mostly shoots with virtually a fully auto camera, the subject matter here is more unique to me than it would be to a person who sees this regularly. Such a person would be a better judge than I. I've given you a 10 rating because you are who you are; just as I would give others like you - phototoad, fluffy, etc nothing less. I am sure this is an excellent capture.
One last comment. I studied it further and realized the "story" of the capture. The painter represents the 'capturer" of the scene. He represents you. Both of you are capturing the scene. The scene or subject is the sailboat race. By softening the painter you are "celebrating" his activity (as well as yours) in providing this scene to your viewer. Your capture tells a fine story. You see, this is an excellent creation. It does deserve a 10 rating.
I often wonder if those photographers here on the Blog who have the excellent photographic skills that your work displays knows how to tell a story so well. That capability distinguishes an artist from simply a photographer. This can be seen very clearly in many photographers who post excellent bird captures. But, they tell no story. They are simply repeating over and over again their technical expertise, but show no depth of understanding of what art means.
#2 Fri June 25, 2010 2:46pm
So, that Bob, a man of few words, eh?
Great comments, Bob!
Jason, I like this a lot better than the brown toned picture. The purplish tint reminiscent of dark room selenium toning unlocks it from the expectations of reality and tacks it on the board of audience believablility. I see it as a representation of event and viewer, not as a literal report of what's happening.
The part I don't like so much is the man (painter?). I like the fact there's a person there, but I can't see clearly enough what he's doing. My first impulse was that he's there working on a laptop computer, but the painter theory works better.
ah, once again i would like to thank you both for your considered opinions, be a lot easier if we just went down the pub and talked about it all
@Bob. For me, there's no need for you to describe yourself as an amateur (failed or otherwise) i think your opinions are perfectly valid and seem as well informed and articulate as any i come across online (more so than the majority in fact). I'm totally crap at playing music, but i've always got a strong opinion on who can play and who cant
And yes, i thought about your comments, and i guess its because i started out as an artist rather than a technical photographer, for me, the story is the thing, not sure why i'm taking pictures if i'm not trying to say something. So thank you very much for spotting that.
@chris. The man was actually a photographer (but for me, thats the same as an artist
And i did originally want that to be clear, but in the end chose a shot where it wasnt, knowing that the stripey jumper and ambiguity would make the story be one of a painter.
I think thats called poetic license
Freelance creative, happiest when i'm taking or painting pictures
For the fine photo and the artist's comments to remember I put this in my favs. I will message you a short story when I have time. It is soul-mate relevant. Now, I know I am not the crazy I often wonder that I may be. Thanks, Jason.